try making it a longer story next time.«1» try making it a longer story next time.«1» 5.5/10READERReport 2004-04-14 23:34:03pretty good i give it a 7/10 good detail but could use alil more keep up the good job and write more like a part 2 to this 1 alil longer and better :)READERReport 2004-03-30 13:54:15that was good but too short. Xxx 3 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2008-05-20 21:34:39it had bad grammar, but the idea was good. . … try making it a longer story next time.«1» try making it a longer story next time.«1» 3 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2008-05-20 21:34:39it had bad grammar, but the idea was good. . … 3 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2008-05-20 21:34:39it had bad grammar, but the idea was good. . … try making it a longer story next time.«1» try making it a longer story next time.«1» 3 comments«1»Anonymous readerReport 2008-05-20 21:34:39it had bad grammar, but the idea was good. . … 5.5/10READERReport 2004-04-14 23:34:03pretty good i give it a 7/10 good detail but could use alil
